Also, I think I threw around ''he'' and ''his'' a little indiscriminately. Hopefully no one got confused?
I found it clear enough. What gets me furious every time, though, and that's not directed towards you at all, is the tendency to refer to people exclusively by their title and to switch to their new ones sometimes without any attention being drawn to it. At least include their bloody names!
I have a complicated relationship with the War of the Roses. I'm a Yorkist through-and-through even though I hate the Burgundians and strongly support Louis XI, which by right should make me a fervent Lancastrian, but the Beauforts are such shits.
If there had been fewer Neville sons needing lands and wives, and fewer daughters to be married off to potential allies, would there have been so much intense competition and squabbling with the Nevilles at the heart of it? Other families also had these aggressive and heiress-hunting younger sons roaming around ready to start a feud or try to get inconvenient relatives or rivals disgraced or killed, eg the Percies.