Hey
I'm not done yet, I got kind of busy with some other things, but here's my critiques as of now:
1. This seems a little fast paced. Perhaps that's just my view, but it seems frenetic. Maybe zoom in, so to speak, a bit more?
2. I think you contradicted yourself at one point, regarding the Kennedy near assassination. I believe at one point you said the driver was killed, but then you mentioned a Secret Service agent being the victim of the gunman.
3. You mentioned Kennedy replaced Johnson with Leroy Collins, but I remember reading in the past that Kennedy was considering moderate Southern governor of North Carolina Terry Sandford. Was Collins another choice?
That's all I've got as of now (my apologies). I'm still confused who George Forsyth is, would you mind telling me whom he is based on?
Thank you, have a pleasant night/ day/ whatever it is in your time zone .
Collins wanted the job in 1960.terry sanford was considered I did not want to repeat what other writers had written.
George Forsyth was based of the actor pete duel.
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This is Lerk from the other forum right, if you don't mind me asking?